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I'll Always Love You by ~WildLotus:iconWildLotus:



full and tired and holding on
the edge is tipping, the tide is strong
im falling faster than i can see
flying farther than i know to be
and thats ok, cause here we go
you and me up high, down low
swinging through the dreamtime stars
driving round in broke down cars
sleeping deep through daylight heat
dancing hard to that all night beat
and in the still i see your smile
even though its been a while
street smart punk or rock star fame
i'll always love you just the same
©2008-2010 ~WildLotus
:iconwildlotus:

Author's Comments

i wrote this for my partner in crime ;)

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submitting to :iconrawem0tion:

for this weeks theme; BFF (Best Friends Forever)

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:iconbeccc:
Well written! I love the rhythm :thumbsup:
:iconastuteenigma:
Wow this flows so flawlessly. Great job. I really like it!
:iconwildlotus:
thank you!! i actually wrote it when i was a bit upset with the person, to maintain patience and perspective :D

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"Whats freedom and magic without love?" ~Massive Attack
:iconwildlotus:
Thank you :)

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"Whats freedom and magic without love?" ~Massive Attack
:iconsweetpea06:
love the flow of this one...it's really good! ^-^

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So many feelings...but nothing to say...everything is written...it's better this way...
*RawEm0tion
:iconwildlotus:
:D thank you very much!

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"Whats freedom and magic without love?" ~Massive Attack
:iconkittykittyhunter:
BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL. :heart: I loved the imagery in this! It had such a nice flow to it and was incredibly sweet, and the lack of punctauation and capitals just ensured that it was riddled with innocence... seriously, this was fantastic.

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yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
:iconwildlotus:
:blushes: Thanks so very much !
i like to imagine what the poems would sound/feel like spoken out loud, by me and/or another person it helps me get the feel for where i might want to put punctuation, line breaks and capitals, (sometimes i actually read em out loud per a friends suggestion) i imagine/feel this one as one big run on sentence ending in a :)

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"Whats freedom and magic without love?" ~Massive Attack
:iconcrim-d:
too short
just elaborate the imagery and it would be great

quick bursts of movie catch phrases will not get you far

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I am a critic.

"If you have time to be depressed, why not grace us with your talents?"

*RawEm0tion

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